8 Comments
User's avatar
𝐂𝐁 𝐌𝐚𝐬𝐨𝐧's avatar

So. Good. (And I feel so sad for both of them, but for different reasons.)

Expand full comment
Caitriana NicNeacail's avatar

Looking forward to Part 3

Expand full comment
Nur Nadar's avatar

Okay so you must have dated a narcissistic woman before, right? You describe the narcissist - codependent relationship way too well to not have real life experience.

This is really good dude, well done

Expand full comment
Some Guy's avatar

I like she said she’s not wanted twice and he still didn’t pick up on it.

Expand full comment
Jack Backes's avatar

That was actually an editing oversight but since you like it I’m keeping it in.

Expand full comment
Some Guy's avatar

Forgot to add this yesterday but thought about it again this morning: this reason this works is because he repeatedly wants something ineffable and can’t ever quite define it and she wants some kind of validation from him about her value. So she asks not once but twice, he has the chance on the second time to say what he failed to say in the first shot and as soon as she leaves he texts her something but we know it’s a lie. He wants to want something. He had the chance. He didn’t take it.

Expand full comment
𝐂𝐁 𝐌𝐚𝐬𝐨𝐧's avatar

I agree, the repetition feels authentic. I could see that it was part of her pattern of spiraling

Expand full comment
Some Guy's avatar

It works really well (I think)

Expand full comment